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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Shaken up

    This hits the reader right in the face.Which is good.You just need to work along the realistic and plausible parts a bit more.

    Feb 25, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Mastering an Art

    A good job for a first start.

    Jan 12, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Alone - please tell me what you think :)

    Not bad but you can work on being clearer about your ideas in other poems. Good luck

    Dec 30, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Get Used to It

    I found this decent for a reading.There is no problem whatsoever, except for the conversations in the beginning.

    Dec 11, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Aja, Aja

    If Aja Aja is pronounced as aa-ja than it means "come come".

    Dec 11, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Sounds of the Santoor (A Tale of Hundred strings)

    Thank you all for your reviews.They were very helpful.

    Nov 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: My life would be complete

    Not any flaws to point out to, so I guess this one gets a gold star.

    Nov 13, 2009
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Amazing Books

    1.The Black Swan 2.Freakonomics 3.Outliers 4.The complete Sherlock Holmes Just one of them is fiction.

    Nov 6, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Pride

    This was very nice.Keep writing poems like these. All the best with your future writing.

    Nov 6, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Strange love

    Thank you all for your reviews.They were very helpful.

    Nov 5, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: for my little princess

    Quite good for a start.

    Nov 5, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re:

    This was good as a general story. Would like to see what part 3 would be like.All the best

    Nov 4, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Strange Love III-The butterfly effect

    Thanks for the feedback.If possible, I may be able to work on X's role a little more and try to improve the story.

    Oct 20, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Storm

    Quite good for a first poem. The technique of building the climax was just brilliant.The element of surprise was very nice and the overall presentation was brilliant. The last line ...

    Oct 12, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Strange love

    Thanks.Once my holidays start ill post some more of this kind of stuff.Hopefully,it should be as good.

    Oct 4, 2009


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